Fiasco of Adventures -Creating new culture

@Roccandil, Sweet, I’ll check out Nightlord because eventually I’m going to have to do way more research on vampires lol. There is so much lore out there that I don’t want to recreate the wheel. Maybe just tweak a existing one.

Check out this new Chapter @Roccandil. I’m interested in your critique. :O)

“Kevin Jones deals with the ramifications from the Modoc Bridge, which have an unexpected and profound effect on his relationship with Julianna.”

Chapter Six from my story Fiasco of Adventures.

This will be the last chapter I release before (God Willing) publishing my story. That will take some time, so now would be a great time to catch up! Thanks for reading if you you do.

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https://victorjames.substack.com/p/fiasco-of-adventures-chapter-6-interlude?r=19vr6n&s=w&utm_campaign=post&utm_medium=web

@Roccandil  Hey thanks for reading! Well, I did base New Haven on a real place. It’s a mid-town turning into a city, given its proximity to Nor. Cal, so it’s growing, which I actually get into in the next chapter a bit. Sort of an allegory of Kevin and Julianna’s relationship, so I did choose that town on purpose lol.  The town I chose literally would be hampered by that one bridge collapse. It’s surrounded by mountains with two main thoroughfares, so trucks would have to go around to get there, which cost money, not to mention the materials that were lost in the explosion. But even more expensive can slow down a medium town’s economy. Sport league don’t usually wait for places to build their stadium. Actually, I should put that in before I publish!  That the reason it will cripple the economy is because it will cost so much to get back on schedule to meet the seasons deadlines or else lose the team entirely. Thanks for that catch! I am actually going to add that before I publish. :O)

Hmm. I don’t mind the trope I used here. Kevin got himself into this spot by, as you mentioned in the last chapter, not trusting Julianna or himself. The idea for this story came from watching someone who kept digging himself deeper into holes. In fact, most of my friends seem to have done this with wonderful women in their lives at one point lol. So, a lot of what I’m writing is from what I’ve observed being their wingman.

Glad the pacing and construction was at least on point. I’m learning here lol.

Thanks for reading, I really do appreciate it. It’s been a lifelong goal to publish something, so this really will be the last chapter I release because the rest of the story is wild lol. I’m searching for a cover artist as we speak and getting a distributor as well! I’ll link the finished product, God willing, in the next few months. I might start posting my next novel actually since I’m halfway done. And this one is tricky so far.

@Roccandil  I agree, it is being manipulative, yet I feel a sense of entropy, when it comes to this hero and this relationship, is needed. They seemed to do this a lot in the past with superheroes, where they were flawed from the beginning. I don’t see Spiderman being as awesome as he is without being selfish in the beginning and letting that criminal get away. Or Cap failing and Bucky dying. Or Thunderbird dying in the new X-Men second mission. To me, early failure used to be a hallmark of a hero, that he had to persevere through.

Kevin is not this born to be a hero kind of guy, who makes all the right choices in the face of adversity. He’s basically a good guy who is lazy, and half-azzing his way through life who lucked out with Julianna. If he is going to be a hero, he’s going to have to learn and he’s going to have to earn it. To me, too many characters these days know what to do all the time from day one. Villains are always given such nuance these days that most are anti-heroes with great stories, but heroes seems to be pretty vanilla. At least to me. This is why I feel there hasn’t really been current (American) heroes who have resonated with people like those in the past. Manga seems to get it though. Nearly every hero in Manga is severely flawed personally, and fail early on. My hope is to give Kevin some real flaws to overcome, not just Mal’s, but internal ones as well that being with Julianna is exposing.

You can’t overcome entropy without first introducing it. :O) Love the feedback! I hope others don’t mind the trope! lol.

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